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How does that sound? I need to take wedding photos in the afternoon (4 hours), and I want to be in the morning. My family has many children, boys especially. so that no ladies only. I do not want to sound snobbish or rude.
Thank you!


"You are cordially invited to the ladies
Mimosa and only bagel Bachelorette Party
In honor of Jane Doe.
Because of the mother-of-the-bride
Doe's mother, with
Friends Thing 1 and
Thing 2 Cake also
served. The event was held on
Mother-of-the-House Bridal Suite
E. 12,345 XX St. N.
Doe, City State, 12345

On Sat, 11 October 2008. Beverages and
Games begin at 10.03 clock

Be sure to confirm your participation, 4 October, so we
put a glass of champagne!
Mother Doe (111) 222-3333 or --
Thing1: (111) 222-3333

The bride is registered
Bed Bath & Beyond "

6 comments:

Julie C said...

A little too much. And a bit of bad taste. Your lady will host the Bridal Shower. (The mother held to celebrate the engagement.)
It is placed by his mother, is greeted by her. (But she needs her maid of honor.)

You are cordially invited
The ladies do
Bagel Mimosa Bridal Shower
Honoring Ann Jane Doe
Start Date:
Time:
At

Hosted by mother's name Doe
And co-organizers of Mr. Tuesday
Lady and Thursday

Please confirm your attendance to:
By calling 555-1212
[O RSVP cards include]

The bride is registered
Bed, Bath and Beyond

parasomn... said...

I think it sounds great! It is not at all snobbish or rude. I think the writing of "Ladies Only" bits in the title seems a good way to understand that mothers leave their children at home, and shower with a brunch is a great idea.

Only stylistic / grammatical, I think it would organize a little bit re:

"Mother Doe Thing 1 and Thing 2 requests the pleasure of your company in a Ladies Only mimosa bagel and bridal shower in honor of Jane Doe, Saturday 11 October, 2008 ...." [keep everything else the same]

Congratulations!

parasomn... said...

I think it sounds great! It is not at all snobbish or rude. I think the writing of "Ladies Only" bits in the title seems a good way to understand that mothers leave their children at home, and shower with a brunch is a great idea.

Only stylistic / grammatical, I think it would organize a little bit re:

"Mother Doe Thing 1 and Thing 2 requests the pleasure of your company in a Ladies Only mimosa bagel and bridal shower in honor of Jane Doe, Saturday 11 October, 2008 ...." [keep everything else the same]

Congratulations!

Katie said...

I believe it is necessary to include the cake is served. To keep this short and sweet. Moreover, say, if all starts at 10:03 to have that game and then start ... The drinks are not in the call, mentioned the beginning of the sentence. Besides it sounds great! Enjoy!

Treebear... said...

It does not seem rude at all, but is the mother of the bride is not his daughter take a shower - the maid of honor to. In fact, it is considered bad taste.

roar said...

whats at 10:03? and one and thing 2? I like the idea of a glass of champagne RSVP. thts cute.

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